Question : Review my resume and edited?
A determined and dedicated person, seeking a part-time job to obtain a responsible and challenging position where my education and work experience will have valuable application within a progressive organization in their stock department.
HIGHLIGHTS OF QUALIFICATIONS
•Completed: Grade 11 (OSSD)
•Reliable, enthusiastic, sociable and able deal with any struggles or challenges.
•Organized, quick learner and dependable hard-worker.
•Honest, punctual and easy to work with.
•Enjoys working individually or with a team.
•Excellent hand skills using tools to assemble and repair things.
•Basic knowledge of PC and computer software
•Languages: English and Arabic.
•Ability to work in a fast paced environment and multi-tasking.

RELEVANT SKILLS AND EXPERIENCES
Fundraising Organizer
•Organizing and rearranging paperwork and files.
•Great ability using faxes and printers.
•Assembling sound systems and computer projectors.
•Selling food, tickets, and items.
Computer Skills:
•Basic computer programming skills using Turing programming language software.
•Excellent skills using computer editing programs (Photoshop, flash, illustrator, etc.)
•Admirable skills using Microsoft office software.
Food preparation skills:
•Great ability to follow and listen to instructions.
•Developed a good knowledge and practice in food preparation, service, sanitation and safety.
•Able to remember different recipes and techniques.

VOLUNTEER EXPERIENCE
Fundraising Organizer Anadol Islamic Centre 2009 – 2010
EDUCATION AND TRAINING
OSSD: Ontario Secondary School Diploma
Stephen Lewis Secondary School 2006 – 2010
Introduction to Information Technology in Business
Stephen Lewis Secondary School 2007 – 2008
Computer Engineering Courses
Stephen Lewis Secondary school 2008 – 2009
Media Art Courses
Stephen Lewis Secondary school 2008 – 2009
fundraising software

Best answer:

Answer by Peter D
Let’s start with the opening part. This looks a little long for me to wade through.
Looks like you want a part-time job in some company’s stock department, so why not just say that.
Then you could put the other assertions about your core skills or character in a subsequent paragraph.
So then it might read:
Objective: Seeking a part-time, responsible and challenging position in the stock department of a progressive organisation
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Key Strengths:
- Determined and dedicated
- Brings relevant experience
- Will add value to the stock department team

Something along these lines will make it better, I believe.
For more info on this first part, see below: